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Backstory:

This is the 2nd time you reviewed this, Alan, the last time was in mid November. IF YOU WANT TO REVIEW THE ORIGINAL VERSION BEFORE CLASS TO REFRESH YOUR MEMORY, FEEL FREE TO AT THIS ADDRESS 
http://soundclick.com/share.cfm?id=11937203
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This is meant to be in the style of Avril Lavigne, Kelly Clarkson, Pink...peeved off woman song. 

We attempted to make the changes you suggested but are not certain it is "there" yet. 
Changes made 
1- Take out extra bar of music in between verses 1 and 2
2- Make the pre-chorus more stand out
3- Repeat the melody in verses on lines 3 to better match with line 1...for better flow and to make the "hooky melody" come out more--Not sure we succeeded here...may still need alterations in lyric and or melody---I know where I feel it needs attention still, want to see if you agree...


Please advise further as we try to tighten this up as much as possible, thanks!!

Kimberly
Nov 2012 ARS
 CLASS 205 ALAN Jan 5 2013

Lyrics:

                                                  
The Tortured Type


Real love is staring you straight in your face
But you can’t see it
I've got your back, I swore to you I'd never stray
You don't believe it


You pull me in close, then push me away,
tell me ya miss me, miss me, when I’m gone 
You’re afraid you’ll lose your grip on me 
but refuse to hold on

Rise
Sometimes it seems you’re only thinking of yourself
So I can’t help but wonder, yeah, I wonder to 
myself

Chorus
Maybe you like  
Throwing your  heart on that knife
you thrive on self pity, and your drama’s 
a lie
and in your  mind, you seem right at 
home to me
so I wonder if it’s all because you wanna be
the tortured type

Verse 3

It's not you that’s holding you back,
It’s who you think you are
It’s not okay to ask for my help
Then brag about your scars

Rise
Sometimes it seems you’re only thinking of yourself
So I can’t help but wonder, yeah, I wonder to 
myself
Chorus
Maybe you like  
Throwing your  heart on that knife
you thrive on self pity, and your drama’s 
a lie
and in your mind, you seem right at 
home to me
so I wonder if it’s all because............
 (Repeat)
Because you like
Throwing your  heart on that knife
you thrive on self pity, and your drama’s 
a lie
and in your mind, you seem right at 
home to me
so I wonder if it’s all because you wanna be the tortured type 


bridge
This is all beginning to wear me down,
And there’s only so long I can care
Change won’t come overnight,
but you have to start somewhere…

Rise
Sometimes it seems you’re only thinking of yourself
So  I can’t help but wonder, yeah, I wonder to 
myself

Maybe you like throwing your heart on that knife 
you thrive on self pity, and your drama’s a lie 
and in your mind, you seem right at home to me 
so I wonder if it’s all because, because, because.....
 
you like throwing your heart on that knife 
you thrive on self pity, and your drama’s a lie 
and in your mind, you seem right at home to me 
so I wonder if it's all because 
you wanna be the tortured type 

tag
the tortured type
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